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I believe that television and movies can effect to people to do crime. Due to the fact that people are effected by their experiences in a daily lives. Various media around our lives can be indirect experience to people who spend their time for watching video. Moreover, surge from people these days spend their time with media could make a lot of problem. We have to regulate young people to be careful watching violent videos.

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Hey Yun Ju! 

Movies and television influence our behavior because they make us less active. Looking at films is a passive activity. If we watch too much, we become unhealthy, both mentally and physically. We stop using our own imagination when we see things acted out for us.

- Kristine ^^ 

I believe that television and movies can effect to people to do crime.
>> I believe that television and movies can influence people to commit crimes.
Due to the fact that people are effected by their experiences in a daily lives.
>> Due to the fact that people are affected by their experiences in their daily lives.
Various media around our lives can be indirect experience to people who spend their time for watching video. 
>> Various media in our lives can be an indirect experience for people who spend their time watching videos.
Moreover, surge from people these days spend their time with media could make a lot of problem. 
>> Moreover, the surge in people these days who spend their time with media could cause a lot of problems.
We have to regulate young people to be careful watching violent videos.
>> We have to regulate young people to be careful when watching violent videos.
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