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What is your best travel tip?

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What is your best travel tip?

There are three main tips for my best trip.

First, walking a lot.
Because if you walk a lot, you can find out hidden attractions. Taking pitures in such places is also the good things of traveling.
If you're luckly, you can get beautiful pictures to leave in your life. ^^
I used this tip to walk through wonderful views of the streets and look aroud old antique shops. I also took good selfi.

Second, eating delicious food.
I like to eat delicious food. Eating delicious food makes me feel good and it is good to know the culture of country.
So, I try to eat a lot of good during the trip.

Lastly, I take a lot of pictures.
If I take a lot of pictures, I think I can remember experience for long time and keep the feeling of the trip, and if I look at the pictures after a long time, I think I will be smile while remembering the trip.

Have a nice weekend, teacher Jade!!

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A wonderful Saturday, Yun! Thank you for sharing your great travel tips! I'm thrilled to hear about your wonderful experiences and the joy you find in exploring, capturing memories, and savoring delicious food. Your ideas are really amazing and will make any trip something to remember. I will make sure to remember these tips when I travel next time. Have a fantastic weekend! 😊
~ T. Jade^^
What is your best travel tip?
There are three main tips for my best trip.
>> Correct
First, walking a lot.
>> First, walk a lot.
Because if you walk a lot, you can find out hidden attractions. 
>> Because if you walk a lot, you can find hidden attractions.
Taking pitures in such places is also the good things of traveling.
>> Taking pictures in such places is also a good thing about traveling.
If you're luckly, you can get beautiful pictures to leave in your life. ^^
>> If you're lucky, you can get beautiful pictures to leave in your life. 
I used this tip to walk through wonderful views of the streets and look aroud old antique shops. 
>> I used this tip to walk through wonderful views of the streets and look around old antique shops.
I also took good selfi.
>> I also took a good selfie.
Second, eating delicious food.
>> Correct
>> OR: Second, eat delicious foods.
I like to eat delicious food. 
>> Correct
Eating delicious food makes me feel good and it is good to know the culture of country.
>> Eating delicious food makes me feel good, and it is good to know the culture of a country.
So, I try to eat a lot of good during the trip.
>> So, I try to eat a lot of good food during the trip.
Lastly, I take a lot of pictures.
>> Correct
If I take a lot of pictures, I think I can remember experience for long time and keep the feeling of the trip, and if I look at the pictures after a long time, I think I will be smile while remembering the trip.
>>If I take a lot of pictures, I think I can remember the experience for a long time and keep the feeling of the trip, and if I look at the pictures after a long time, I think I will smile while remembering the trip.
Have a nice weekend, teacher Jade!!
>> Have a nice weekend, teacher Jade!
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