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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the worst skin disease?

I think, The worst common skin disease is athlete's foot.
Athlete's foot is a kinds of skin disease that occurs in the foot and toes.
It's causes skin peeling, itchy foot all day, and make feel stress of life.
In addition, athlete's foot can spread to other people.
For instance, almost Korea men have to go to the army.
Sadly, many people had a athlete's foot in the army.
The reason is that they wear thick, heavy, and airless shoes all day long.
Even, some my friends had a athlete's foot when he was army.
Luckily, I have never been this skin disease.
So, I think, We have to keep our shoes and foot clean to prevent this skin disease.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the worst skin disease?


I think, The worst common skin disease is athlete's foot.
>> CORRECT!
Athlete's foot is a kinds of skin disease that occurs in the foot and toes.
>> Athlete's foot is a kind of skin disease that occurs in the foot and toes.
OR >> Athlete's foot is a kind of skin disease that occurs in the foot and toes due to fungal infection.
It's causes skin peeling, itchy foot all day, and make feel stress of life.
>> It's causes skin peeling, foot itching, and stress.
In addition, athlete's foot can spread to other people.
>> CORRECT!
For instance, almost Korea men have to go to the army.
>> For instance, most Korean men have to go to the army.
Sadly, many people had a athlete's foot in the army.
>> Sadly, many people had an athlete's foot in the army.
The reason is that they wear thick, heavy, and airless shoes all day long.
>> CORRECT!
Even, some my friends had a athlete's foot when he was army.
>> Even some of my friends had an athlete's foot when he was in the army.
Luckily, I have never been this skin disease.
>> Luckily, I have never had this skin disease.
So, I think, We have to keep our shoes and foot clean to prevent this skin disease.
>> CORRECT!
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