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Homework : Which place do you prefer to live in, Busan or Gimpo? why?

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I prefer to live in Gimpo. Because there are many hot places nearby. From Gimpo, it is convenient to go to all parts of Seoul by public transportation, and there are various things to enjoy in Seoul, including amusement parks, restaurants, and flagship stores.
Also most of my friends live in capital area. I can't give up using time with my friends.

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Hello In Ae,
You finally found the way how to write our homework and thank you for your effort in doing this. EWriting is a very good way of expressing your thought without being disturbed, so enjoy doing it :) Kindly check on those sentences where I give a little correction.
Have a good day!
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I prefer to live in Gimpo. Because there are many hot places nearby. 
>>> I prefer to live in Gimpo because there are many hot places nearby.

From Gimpo, it is convenient to go to all parts of Seoul by public transportation, and there are various things to enjoy in Seoul, including amusement parks, restaurants, and flagship stores.
>> CORRECT!

Also most of my friends live in capital area. 
>>> Also, most of my friends live in the capital area. 
 
I can't give up using time with my friends.
>> CORRECT!
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