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My family moved to live a minimal life, and each decided to throw away unnecessary clothes or things, but it seems that everyone in the family couldn't throw away half of them.
In my case, I think it is because I have a lot of personal items such as dolls and doll props as my hobby of collecting dolls.
However, it is not easy to give up my hobby because it is my way of relieving stress.
So, my family decided to abandon the minimal life.

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Happy Friday, Eliana!
I appreciate living in a minimalist way, we help ourselves and we help the environment. I hope people will realize that we are feeding the Earth with our trashes!
Have a great day and continue what you have been doing to improve your skill.
Aki~

My family moved to live a minimal life, and each decided to throw away unnecessary clothes or things, but it seems that everyone in the family couldn't throw away half of them.
>>>  CORRECT!

In my case, I think it is because I have a lot of personal items such as dolls and doll props as my hobby of collecting dolls.
>>>  CORRECT!

However, it is not easy to give up my hobby because it is my way of relieving stress.
>>>  CORRECT!

So, my family decided to abandon the minimal life.
>>>  CORRECT!
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