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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the best and worst things about tap water and bottled water?

The advantage of tap water is that cheaper than bottled water.
And, in my country case, tap water is clean, so we can use boil it and drink it or
we can also use it when I cook.
But, the disadvantage of tap water is the water tastes weird and this water be less nutritious than bottled water
because of the disinfectant.
So, many people don't prefer it use tap water as bottled water.
The advantage of bottled water is that it is clear and safety water, so we can drink it anytime.
And price more expensive than tap water, but we can buy it anywhere.
There are public drink water in park and crowded places, but they don't well manage it.
So I prefer bottled water.
The disadvantage of bottled water is that is not eco-friendly.
Packing to water bottles use a lot of plastic bottle.
Unfortunately, plastic is bad for the environment.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the best and worst things about tap water and bottled water?


The advantage of tap water is that cheaper than bottled water.
>> The advantage of tap water is that it's cheaper than bottled water.
And, in my country case, tap water is clean, so we can use boil it and drink it or
we can also use it when I cook.
>> And, in my country's case, tap water is clean, so we can use it, boil it, and drink it or we can also use it when I cook.
OR >> >> And, in my country's case, tap water is clean, so we can use it, boil it, and drink it or we can also use it when cooking.
But, the disadvantage of tap water is the water tastes weird and this water be less nutritious than bottled water
because of the disinfectant.
>> But, the disadvantage of tap water is that the water tastes weird, and this water can be less nutritious than bottled water because of the disinfectant.
So, many people don't prefer it use tap water as bottled water.
>> So, many people don't prefer to use tap water as bottled water.
The advantage of bottled water is that it is clear and safety water, so we can drink it anytime.
>> The advantage of bottled water is that it is clear and safe, so we can drink it anytime.
And price more expensive than tap water, but we can buy it anywhere.
>> And the price is more expensive than tap water, but we can buy it anywhere.
There are public drink water in park and crowded places, but they don't well manage it.
>> There are public drinking fountains in the park and crowded places, but they don't manage it well.
So I prefer bottled water.
>> CORRECT!
The disadvantage of bottled water is that is not eco-friendly.
>> The disadvantage of bottled water is that it is not eco-friendly.
Packing to water bottles use a lot of plastic bottle.
>> Packing water bottles uses a lot of plastic bottles.
Unfortunately, plastic is bad for the environment.
>> CORRECT!
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