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Preparing meal takes a lot of time from shopping ingredient to cook it.
Most of young couples work at each of their company in Korea these days.
So Nobody would want to cook after work.

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Preparing meal takes a lot of time from shopping ingredient to cook it.
>>> Preparing a meal takes a lot of time from shopping for ingredients to cooking it.

Most of young couples work at each of their company in Korea these days.
>>> Most young couples work at each of their company in Korea these days.

So Nobody would want to cook after work.
>>> CORRECT!
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