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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What diseases can you get from flood water?

There are many kinds of damage to humans by flood.
Among them we can get diseases caused from flood.
The first is skin disease and food poisoning.
Floods water is very dirty, so this water have a lot of germ and virus.
So, severs flooding, it is difficult to get clean water, so it is easy to get skin disease like a atopy, food poisoning, and enteritis.
Next is diseases caused by insects such as mosquitoes.
Insects such as mosquitoes live in areas where there is a lot of water or humidity like a pond.
But, floods can cause many mosquitoes to gather and carry the disease such as dengue fever and malaria to people.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What diseases can you get from flood water?


There are many kinds of damage to humans by flood.
>> CORRECT!
Among them we can get diseases caused from flood.
>> Among them we can get diseases caused by flood.
The first is skin disease and food poisoning.
>>  The major diseases are skin disease and food poisoning.
Floods water is very dirty, so this water have a lot of germ and virus.
>> Flood water is very dirty, so this water has a lot of germs and viruses.
So, severs flooding, it is difficult to get clean water, so it is easy to get skin disease like a atopy, food poisoning, and enteritis.
>> Because of severe flooding, it is difficult to get clean water, so it is easy to get diseases like a atopy, food poisoning, and enteritis.
Next is diseases caused by insects such as mosquitoes.
>> Next are diseases caused by insects such as mosquitoes.
Insects such as mosquitoes live in areas where there is a lot of water or humidity like a pond.
>> Insects such as mosquitoes live in areas where there is a lot of water or humidity like ponds and other bodies of water.
But, floods can cause many mosquitoes to gather and carry the disease such as dengue fever and malaria to people.
>> CORRECT!
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