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Why is it important to be always on time?

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Be always on right time is important because when we forgot what time to be on there
Then that person will lose his or she¡¯s time oh, so they will be mad.
So we have to always be on time.

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Wow! thank you Eugene for doing your homework. I agree with your answer. See you later :) 
~ T. Demi ^^
Be always on right time is important because when we forgot what time to be on there
Then that person will lose his or she¡¯s time oh, so they will be mad.
>> Being always on time is important because when we forget the right time to be there, then another person will lose his or her time and they will be mad.
So we have to always be on time.
>> So we have to be always on time.
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