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2023-08-09 2027

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Q: In three to five sentences, write the reasons why people need to make the right choices.
A: I think the biggest reason that people need to make the right choices is making right choices helps them to live a better life.
Usually bad choices in people's life makes people's physical or mental health worse than before, and that can be a bad effect in their life.
Also, mkaing right choices is not just for me, but for my friends and families too.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework.

~T. Divina^^

1.  I think the biggest reason that people need to make the right choices is making right choices helps them to live a better life.
>>I think the biggest reason why people need to make the right choices is for them to live a better life.

2. Usually bad choices in people's life makes people's physical or mental health worse than before, and that can be a bad effect in their life.
>>Usually, bad choices in people's lives makes their physical or mental health worse, which can lead to bad effects in their lives.

3. Also, mkaing right choices is not just for me, but for my friends and families too.
>>Also, making the right choices doesn't just affect me, but my friends and family, too.
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