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Do you think your future job will not be taken over by AI?

작성자: 이*주
2023-08-09 2665

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Personally, some parts of my job are already taken over by AI such as ChatGPT.
Before I resign from a job, I was working for an IT company as a programmer.
About senior programmer, they can make functions or control DataBase better way than AI.
On the other hand, junior programmer like me, they cannot handle with the problem without Goolge or senior.
It means AI has many advantages in many aspects.
Comparing with human from the owner's point of view, AI doesn't need a sleep, break time and even It doesn't pay lots of labor cost.
There is no reason not to hire AI.

But I believe new jobs about field using AI will be created.
Currently, AI cannot ask and keep up the long-term of conversation.
Because DB is an expensive resource that is the reason why don't save previous question.
Therefore, it takes someone that has ability to ask the right question and increases the perspective of thinking!

p.s. I hope there will be a rainbow after raining in your town!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good evening, Hyeon Ju!

It is inevitable for change to take place and AI is unstoppable in ruling our lives for its convenience and affordability. There had been some American companies firing all their human workers and  replacing them all with AI. In our daily lives, any simple to complex activity is now assisted by an AI.

It may not be a far fetched idea that a suburban household may have an AI to help out in doing the basic daily chores such as cooking, cleaning, and doing the laundry.

Youth like you today need to reassess your skills to remain relevant in your profession in the future. As you have mentioned, there will be jobs created because of AI. Let us make AI our allies for progress.

Your ideas are highly valuable and very well-organized. Kindly go over my minute grammar suggestions below. 

Your work is excellent!

By the way, today, better than rainbow is the ray of sunlight for an hour. It's priceless after 16 ceasless days of rain.

See you again!

-T. Donna~

Personally, some parts of my job are already taken over by AI such as ChatGPT.
>> Correct!

Before I resign from a job, I was working for an IT company as a programmer.
>> Before I resigned from a job, I was working for an IT company as a programmer.

About senior programmer, they can make functions or control DataBase better way than AI.
>> Regarding the senior programmer, they can make functions or control DataBase better than AI.

On the other hand, junior programmer like me, they cannot handle with the problem without Goolge or senior.
>> On the other hand, junior programmers like me cannot handle the problem without Google or a senior.

It means AI has many advantages in many aspects.
>> Correct!

Comparing with human from the owner's point of view, AI doesn't need a sleep, break time and even It doesn't pay lots of labor cost.
>> Comparing it with humans from the owner's point of view, AI doesn't need sleep, break time, and it  doesn't  even pay lots of labor cost.

There is no reason not to hire AI.
>> Correct!

But I believe new jobs about field using AI will be created.
>> Correct!

Currently, AI cannot ask and keep up the long-term of conversation.
>> Currently, AI cannot ask and keep up with a long-term of conversation.

Because DB is an expensive resource that is the reason why don't save previous question.
>> Because DB is an expensive resource that is the reason why they don't save previous questions.

Therefore, it takes someone that has ability to ask the right question and increases the perspective of thinking!
>> Therefore, it takes someone who has the ability to ask the right question and increase the perspective of thinking! Very good sentence!

p.s. I hope there will be a rainbow after raining in your town!
>> Correct!
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