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Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What type of weather is the best to go on a holiday? Why?

I like autumn season of Korea.
Autumn is from September to November.
It's little cold in the evening/night this season, but int the morning/afternoon it's a very pleasant day to be active.
The temperature is almost 15 to 20 degrees.
So, Many people go to on domestic trips on Chuseok(Korean Thanksgiving Day).
The Chuseok(Korean Thanksgiving Day) is one of the
big holidays in Korea.
We are take a week off at most.
And next, I like early winter season.
Early winter is less cold among the winter.
So, by this time, many people enjoy outdoor activities and travel.
I don't prefer winter because it's so cold and my body freezes like ice, and also
I don't like summer because it's make me my body melts.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What type of weather is the best to go on a holiday? Why?


I like autumn season of Korea.
>> I like the autumn season in Korea.
Autumn is from September to November.
>> CORRECT!
It's little cold in the evening/night this season, but int the morning/afternoon it's a very pleasant day to be active.
>> It's a little cold in the evening/night in this season, but in the morning/afternoon it's a very pleasant day to be active.
The temperature is almost 15 to 20 degrees.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The temperature is around 15 to 20 degrees Celsius.
So, Many people go to on domestic trips on Chuseok(Korean Thanksgiving Day).
>> So, many people go on domestic trips on Chuseok (Korean Thanksgiving Day).
The Chuseok(Korean Thanksgiving Day) is one of the
big holidays in Korea.
>> Chuseok (Korean Thanksgiving Day) is one of the big holidays in Korea.
We are take a week off at most.
>> We take a week off at most.
And next, I like early winter season.
>> CORRECT!
Early winter is less cold among the winter.
>> Early winter is less colder than the rest of winter.
So, by this time, many people enjoy outdoor activities and travel.
>> So, by this time, many people enjoy outdoor activities and travels.
OR >> So, by this time, many people enjoy outdoor activities and trips.
I don't prefer winter because it's so cold and my body freezes like ice, and also
I don't like summer because it's make me my body melts.
>> I don't prefer winter because it's so cold and my body freezes like ice, and also don't like summer because it makes me feel like my body is going to melt.
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