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If you had to live in another country (for always)

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I don¡¯t want to live in another country, because I am satisfied with my life here in korea. I have my family, my girlfriend, my job here. If I live in another country, I have to find my own nest and a job and relationships with other people. It may be not easy. And if I have big troubles in foreign country, it could be very difficult to find any help. I feel save to live in korea, because I have everthing here.

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Good day, Seung Ki! I really appreciate the time and effort you exerted in making your composition. I'm looking forward to reading more of your works. I'm glad that you are happy and satisfied with your life in your own country. We will talk more in class. I will see you then. Take care always!~ T. Lyn
I don¡¯t want to live in another country, because I am satisfied with my life here in korea. 
>>I don't want to live in another country because I'm satisfied with my life here in Korea.
I have my family, my girlfriend, my job here.
>>Correct.
If I live in another country, I have to find my own nest and a job and relationships with other people.
>>When I live in another country, I have to find my own home, find a job, and have relationships with others. 
It may be not easy. 
>>Doing these things may not be easy.
And if I have big troubles in foreign country, it could be very difficult to find any help.
>>And I get into big trouble in a foreign country, help will be very difficult to find.
I feel save to live in korea, because I have everthing here.
>>I feel safe living in Korea because I have everything here.
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