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How has the Internet changed the world?

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I think the internet changed many things.
We could be connected whole world and communicated anywhere by internet.
Also when I want other country¡¯s products,
I can be received the things in my home.
While i live here, It being possible and i enjoy this world it¡¯s a revolution.

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Hello Su,

I wanted to take a moment to express my gratitude for completing your homework about the Internet. Your effort in writing down your thoughts is truly appreciated. It's wonderful to see your engagement and dedication to learning. Keep up the great work! See you later!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think the internet changed many things.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I believe the internet has changed many things.

We could be connected whole world and communicated anywhere by internet.

>>We can now be connected to the whole world and communicate from anywhere through the internet.

Also when I want other country¡¯s products, I can be received the things in my home.

>> Also, when I want products from other countries, I can have the items delivered to my home.

OR>>Furthermore, when I want products from other countries, I can have them delivered to my home.

While i live here, It being possible and i enjoy this world it¡¯s a revolution.

>> While I live here, the fact that it's possible and that I can enjoy this world feels like a revolution.

OR>> It's like a complete transformation that I can live here and find joy in this world.

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