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Q. Describe an activity that keeps you healty while you enjoy
My favorite activity is the freediving. It is the diving under water without any of breating apparatus. When I had exprienced the snokeling, someone helped me to look at the turtle pulling me to the bottom of the sea. Then, I thought that It was fun and I wanted to dive better and deeper by myself. I got to start searching the video of the freediving. The mooving shape of people in process of free diving from above the sea into the dark and deep sea was quite beautiful and respectful. Afterwards, I registered the class and started to learn the freediving. In fact, It's not easy to feel passion for me, but strangely, I feel it while freediving. I want to test myself more with upright, deeper and comfortable posture.

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Thank you for accomplishing your homework! Writing some sentences in English also contribute to your constant practice. Stay positive, work hard, and success will be knocking on your door. Keep up the good work! I believe in you. See you in class!



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Q. Describe an activity that keeps you healthy while you enjoy
My favorite activity is the free diving.
>> GOOD!
It is the diving under water without any of breating apparatus. 
>> It is diving underwater without using any breathing apparatuses.
When I had exprienced the snokeling, someone helped me to look at the turtle pulling me to the bottom of the sea. 
>> When I did snorkeling, someone helped me to swim to the bottom of the sea to see some turtles.
Then, I thought that It was fun and I wanted to dive better and deeper by myself.
>> GOOD! 
I got to start searching the video of the freediving. 
>> I started searching for videos of free diving.
The mooving shape of people in process of free diving from above the sea into the dark and deep sea was quite beautiful and respectful. 
>> The movement of people while free diving from the shallow sea to the dark, deep sea is quite beautiful and admirable.
Afterwards, I registered the class and started to learn the freediving. 
>> Afterwards, I registered for a class and started to learn free diving.
In fact, It's not easy to feel passion for me, but strangely, I feel it while freediving. 
>> In fact, it is not easy for me to have a passion for something. But strangely, I feel it while free diving.
I want to test myself more with upright, deeper and comfortable posture.
>> I want to try myself for a deeper adventure and have an upright and comfortable posture.
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