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I think it's right.
But isn't the mind the same as the belief of those who embody what's not in the first place
Except for those who have suffered domestic violence or have no family love, I think most of them are right.

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Hello Da Hye,

Great job on completing your homework! Your thoughts are well-expressed. It's okay to have different opinions, and your point about the mind and beliefs is interesting. Keep up the good work and feel free to share more of your ideas in our discussions. If you have any questions or want to talk further, I'm here to help. Keep it up!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think it's right.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I believe it is correct.

But isn't the mind the same as the belief of those who embody what's not in the first place

>>But isn't the mind the same as the beliefs of those who embody things that aren't true to begin with? 

Except for those who have suffered domestic violence or have no family love, I think most of them are right.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I believe that the majority of people, except those who have experienced domestic violence or lack familial affection, are correct.

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