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Hello, T.Faith.
How was your day?
The number of patient/client in the clinic tends to increase these days.
It gives us not only more profit but also tiredness.
I am obviously busy every Monday because of many administrative work.
In addition, the salary day is coming soon.
That's why I have to focus on the salary calculation.
Anyway, I am done with most of today's work.
It's rainy too much outside now.
I am worried if I can drive my car.
That's because my car has a rear-wheel drive system.
Do you know the pros and cons of rear-whell drive system?
It can gives a car more speed, however, it will be dangerous in rainy or snowy day because it tends to be more slippery.
Wring task:
If we get promoted in workplace, it means more profit and reputation.
On the other hand, we have to be more responsible for our work.
We may feel more pressure about it.
And, I heard that promotion also means the approach to retirement.
Have you ever going to work to the company?
Now I should get going.
See you.

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I am fully satisfied with your answer here, Dr. Kim. I have learned about this rear-wheel system, so I am so surprised. You should be extra careful. Indeed, I used to work in an office before, so I know its pros and cons.-Faith-
Hello, T.Faith.
>> Hello, T. Faith.
How was your day?
>> CORRECT
The number of patient/client in the clinic tends to increase these days.
>> The number of patients/clients in the clinic tends to increase these days.
It gives us not only more profit but also tiredness.
>> CORRECT
I am obviously busy every Monday because of many administrative work.
>> I am obviously busy every Monday because of much administrative work.
In addition, the salary day is coming soon.
>> CORRECT
OR Furthermore, pay day is around the corner.
That's why I have to focus on the salary calculation.
>> That's the reason why I have to focus on the salary calculation.
Anyway, I am done with most of today's work.
>> CORRECT
It's rainy too much outside now.
>> CORRECT
OR It is raining cats and dogs now.
I am worried if I can drive my car. 
That's because my car has a rear-wheel drive system.
>> I am worried if I can drive my car because my car has a rear-wheel drive system.
Do you know the pros and cons of rear-whell drive system?
>> Do you know the pros and cons of rear-wheel drive system?
It can gives a car more speed, however, it will be dangerous in rainy or snowy day because it tends to be more slippery.
>> It can give a car more speed, however, it will be dangerous on a rainy or snowy day because it tends to be more slippery.
Wring task:
>> CORRECT
If we get promoted in workplace, it means more profit and reputation.
>> If we get promoted in the workplace, it means more profit and better reputation.
On the other hand, we have to be more responsible for our work.
>> CORRECT
We may feel more pressure about it.
>> We may feel more pressured about it.
And, I heard that promotion also means the approach to retirement.
>> Also, I heard that promotion also means the approach to retirement.
Have you ever going to work to the company?
>> Have you ever worked in your company building?
Now I should get going.
>> Now, I should get going.
See you.
>> CORRECT
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