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Share one interesting new discovery in physics in a few sentences.

작성자: 이*주
2023-08-07 1584

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In my opinion, one interesting new discovery in physics is an observation about gravitational-wave.
Physics is really hard to change such as mathematics.
Perhaps, A new theory in physics is quantum physics that started over 120 years ago.
Therefore, In university, Physics and Math students always argue about which subject is less interesting.
Just between you and me, professors also have a quarrel in this.

Gravitational-wave means according to general relativity when an object that accelerated masses makes a difference of gravity.
Believe it or not, the human makes gravitational-wave too. But We have very tiny mass compare with a black hole or galaxy.
That is why it took more than 100 years to detect over announcing general relativity theory.

I want to talk about more and deeply about physics, but I couldn't.
Because of fall short of English speaking skill!
Oh, This topic makes me motivated to learn English :)

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Hyeon Ju!

After reading your homework answer, I took the time to browse through some articles about gravitational wave and I actually had a headache. ^^Kidding aside, it broadened my perspective about this physics discovery. As years go by, there may be new discoveries and development in physics and science as  a discipline in general.

Some of the studies that scientists debate about are those that deem more research and more intensive studies due to lack of evidences. Nevertheless, how you discussed this new discovery is simplified and substantial.

I think you are nothing short in English to express your thoughts about theories in physics. Hence, thank you for expounding on your answer. I appreciate it. 

For the grammar pointer, I noticed that you capitalize the first letter of the word after the comma when it should not be. Study them carefully below. Overall, you did an excellent job!

See you in class.

-T. Donna~

In my opinion, one interesting new discovery in physics is an observation about gravitational-wave.
>> Correct!

Physics is really hard to change such as mathematics.
>> Correct!

Perhaps, A new theory in physics is quantum physics that started over 120 years ago.
>> Correct!
Or: Perhaps, a new...

Therefore, In university, Physics and Math students always argue about which subject is less interesting.
>> Correct!

Just between you and me, professors also have a quarrel in this.
>> Correct!

Gravitational-wave means according to general relativity when an object that accelerated masses makes a difference of gravity.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

Believe it or not, the human makes gravitational-wave too. But We have very tiny mass compare with a black hole or galaxy.
>> ... But We have very tiny mass compared with a black hole or galaxy.

That is why it took more than 100 years to detect over announcing general relativity theory.
>>  That is why it took more than 100 years to detect over announcing the general relativity theory.

I want to talk about more and deeply about physics, but I couldn't.
>> Correct!

Because of fall short of English speaking skill!
>> Because of falling short of English speaking skill!

Oh, This topic makes me motivated to learn English :)
>> Correct!
Or: Oh, this makes...
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