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HOMEWORK for 08/01
Write 5-8 sentences
TOPIC: What do you think is the best age for people to retire? Why do you think so?

I think best age for people to retier is as soons as posible fast better because when we are young we are good health so we can look at our bodies and we don't have to work hard by our bad bodies. but I think people is don't have to working never.we need just a little work even when we got old

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Good morning to you, Min Seog. Thanks for always doing your best in doing your homework. I appreciate all your effort and hard work. Let's continue to study in the class tomorrow. See you! ~ T. Marie ^^ 
I think best age for people to retier is as soons as posible fast better 
>> I think the best age for people to retire is as soon as possible, the faster, the better. 
because when we are young we are good health so we can look at our bodies and we don't have to work hard by our bad bodies. 
>> Because when we were young, we have good health so we can look after our bodies. 
>> We don't have to work hard when our bodies get bad.
but I think people is don't have to working never.
>> But I think people doesn't have to stop working. 
we need just a little work even when we got old
>> We need to work a little even when we get old. 
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