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When I sleep less I feel tired and think slowly. And I think I am more lazy and annoyed. One or two hours less are OK.

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Hello there, Thomas!

Sleeping less can put us in a disadvantaged condition such as yawning frequently and thinking in a slower pace. Sometimes, we can get an adrenalin rush and become hyperactive but then, our energy can crash and we feel tired as time goes by. Then, sleeping and waking up at a regular time is highly recommended.

You have and introduction, body, and conclusion which means that your answer has complete parts, well done! Your first sentence is also perfect. Keep up the good work always!

I will see you in class.

-T. Donna~

When I sleep less I feel tired and think slowly. 
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

And I think I am more lazy and annoyed. 
>> Correct!
Or: And, I think I am more lazy and annoyed. 

One or two hours less are OK.
>>  One or two hours less is okay.
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