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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think gardening is an expensive hobby?

Many people think gardening is the easy hobby and the cheap hobby.
But, my opinion is some different.
Gardening plants can be cheaper than other hobbies.
However, this hobby should have diligent and patience.
For grow plants, we have to learn about plant knowledge, take care of plants every day, and fight the bugs.
And also, plants can wither because of the weather.
So, we need to patience.
To sum it up, I think this hobby is priceless hobby.
The Achieving something is human effort is one of the hard things.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think gardening is an expensive hobby?


Many people think gardening is the easy hobby and the cheap hobby.
>> Many people think gardening is an easy and cheap hobby.
OR >> Many people think gardening is the easiest and cheapest hobby.
But, my opinion is some different.
>> But, my opinion is a little different.
OR >> But, my opinion is a bit different.
Gardening plants can be cheaper than other hobbies.
>> Gardening can be cheaper than other hobbies.
However, this hobby should have diligent and patience.
>> However, this hobby should have diligence and patience.
OR >> However, this hobby requires diligence and patience.
For grow plants, we have to learn about plant knowledge, take care of plants every day, and fight the bugs.
>>  To grow plants, we have to learn about plants, how to take care of plants every day, and how to fight the bugs.
And also, plants can wither because of the weather.
>> CORRECT!
So, we need to patience.
>> CORRECT!
To sum it up, I think this hobby is priceless hobby.
>> To sum it up, I think this hobby is a priceless hobby.
The Achieving something is human effort is one of the hard things.
>>  Achieving something because of human effort is one of the hard things.

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