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Hello.
It was so busy this morning at the clinic.
Now, there are only a few patients/clients in the clinic though.
As I told you, I should calculate this month's income and expense by this evening.
To shorten extra work after our clinic closes, I am doing various work with my best now.
First of all, I see my patient/clients as fast as I can.
In addition, I calculate all values and update those.
This work will make me can calculate all monthly data so fast.
Furthermore, I am doing many administrative work simultaneously.
Because of many work, I will be exausted at night.
Meanwhile, my daughters are enjoying their vacation in the house.
On the other hand, my wife should take care of them all day.
Writing Task:
Of course, the standard of beauty varies in many countries, depending on their own cultures.
However, all countries might have a same standard of beauty someday because all people in the world can share their thoughts and cultures so easily through SNS, media, and so on.
See you.

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Good morning, Dr. Kim! I hope you were able to accomplish your tasks. See you later!-Faith-
Hello.
>> CORRECT
It was so busy this morning at the clinic.
>> CORRECT
Now, there are only a few patients/clients in the clinic though.
>> CORRECT
As I told you, I should calculate this month's income and expense by this evening.
>> CORRECT
OR As I told you, I should calculate this month's income and expense tonight.
To shorten extra work after our clinic closes, I am doing various work with my best now.
>> CORRECT
First of all, I see my patient/clients as fast as I can.
>> CORRECT
In addition, I calculate all values and update those.
>> CORRECT
This work will make me can calculate all monthly data so fast.
>> This work will make me calculate all monthly data so fast.
Furthermore, I am doing many administrative work simultaneously.
>> Furthermore, I am doing much administrative work simultaneously.
Because of many work, I will be exausted at night.
>> Because of too much work, I will be exhausted at night.
Meanwhile, my daughters are enjoying their vacation in the house.
>> CORRECT
On the other hand, my wife should take care of them all day.
>> CORRECT
OR It implies that my wife has to look after them all day long.
Writing Task:
>> CORRECT
Of course, the standard of beauty varies in many countries, depending on their own cultures.
>> CORRECT
However, all countries might have a same standard of beauty someday because all people in the world can share their thoughts and cultures so easily through SNS, media, and so on.
>> However, all countries might have the same standard of beauty someday because all people in the world can share their thoughts and cultures so easily through SNS, media, and so on.
See you.
>> CORRECT
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