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HOMEWORK for 07/28
Write 5-8 sentences
TOPIC: Where do you think is the best place to raise a family, in a city, or in the countryside? Why do you think so?

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I want live in city with my family because city has many convenient system what I use it so when I need something I can use it easily. but the countryside has less than the city. city has also problem like poison in air and strange guys but convenient is imporant for me

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Good morning, Min Seog! Thank you so much for always being hard working not just in the class, but also in doing your homework. I'm really thankful for this. Let's continue to study harder in the lesson. See you there! ~ T. Marie 
many people have different think that problem
>> Many people have different thinking. 
I want live in city with my family because city has many convenient system what I use it so when I need something I can use it easily. 
>> I want to live in the city with my family because there are many convenient system.
>> I can use it easily when I need it. 
but the countryside has less than the city. 
>> But the countryside has less things compared to the city.
city has also problem like poison in air and strange guys but convenient is imporant for me
>> The city also has problems like air pollution, and strange people. 
>> But convenience is more important for me. 
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