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ESSAY (Please write a short essay to answer the question.)
> What makes a movie a good movie?

There are many things which are make better movie, but i think the best one is the stroy.
Of course, story is not everything at movie. computer effect is important, and action of act or actress too.
However good stroy is the root of movie. if There are only sub element(it means action, effect, handsome acts etc...) it maybe make a lot of money, but it isn't a good movie.
I think good moive is that have good story line .

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Thank you for this Lee. I agree with you. A movie needs to have depth and significance, and that is usually seen in the story plot.

There are many things which are make better movie, but i think the best one is the stroy.
>>>   There are many things which make a better movie, but I think the best one is the story plot.
Of course, story is not everything at movie. 
>>> Of course, the story is not everything in a movie.   
computer effect is important, and action of act or actress too.
>>> Computer effect is important, and the talent/ability of the actor or actress too.  
However good stroy is the root of movie. 
>>>   However, the good story is the root of the movie.
>>> OR: However, the good story is the core of the movie.  (CORE -is the part of something that is central to its existence or character)
if There are only sub element(it means action, effect, handsome acts etc...) it maybe make a lot of money, but it isn't a good movie.
>>> If there are only sub elements (like the action, effect, handsome actors, etc...), it ight make a lot of money, but it isn't necessarily a good movie.
I think good moive is that have good story line .
>>> I think a good movie is one that has a good story line.  
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