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What is your opinion on whether teenagers should have the freedom to make their own choices? Please

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Of course, they have the right to make their own choices freely. I find that anyone can't take the choice and decision away from others. people around me just help me to make a choice including teenagers. You know? most of parents in South Korea tend to not give their child choices, just saying "You have to study hard, You have to go in university." I guess it's not right for child.

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Good answer, Eric! Well done in express your thoughts freely. I admire your thinking and honesty in answering your homework. Keep itup!
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A: Of course, they have the right to make their own choices freely. I find that anyone can't take the choice and decision away from others. people around me just help me to make a choice including teenagers. You know? most of parents in South Korea tend to not give their child choices, just saying "You have to study hard, You have to go in university." I guess it's not right for child.
>> It is important to respect an individual's right to freely make their own choices. Taking away someone's ability to choose is not acceptable. While the people around me offer guidance, ultimately the decision rests with me, even as a teen. Unfortunately, in South Korea, many parents do not give their children the freedom to choose. Instead, they pressure them to excel academically and attend university. This approach is not beneficial for the child.
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