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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you worry about the future availability of water?


I worried about the water scarcity in the future.
These days, I don't think there's a water scarcity at the moment.
But, recently the issue that rise the water scarcity with environmental problems.
If water becomes scarce, the biggest problem is food.
The water is essential to almost vegetable and foods.
So, if becomes water scarcity, the price of food will be go through the roof.
Already, some countries have a severe water scarcity.
Therefore, we need learn water scarcity education in now for the future.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you worry about the future availability of water?



I worried about the water scarcity in the future.
>> I am worried about the water scarcity in the future.
OR >> I feel worried about the water scarcity in the future.
These days, I don't think there's a water scarcity at the moment.
>> CORRECT!
But, recently the issue that rise the water scarcity with environmental problems.
>> But, recently the issue that increases water scarcity is because of environmental problems.
OR >> But, recently the issue that increases water scarcity is due to environmental problems.
If water becomes scarce, the biggest problem is food.
>> CORRECT!
The water is essential to almost vegetable and foods.
>> The water is essential to almost vegetable and other kinds of food.
So, if becomes water scarcity, the price of food will be go through the roof.
>> So, if there's water scarcity, the price of food will go through the roof.
Already, some countries have a severe water scarcity.
>> Some countries already have a severe water scarcity.
OR >> Some countries already suffer from severe water scarcity.
Therefore, we need learn water scarcity education in now for the future.
>> Therefore, we need to learn more about water scarcity and how to handle this situation if it occurs in the future.

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