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#1 Engaging topics
1. To make good body shape & work out
2. Abou climate - I like variety of weathers.
3. food - In fact, I'm not interested in food. But, I hope to talk about basic topic like this with foreigners
4. dogs - I don't have dogs, but I took care of my freinds's dog for 2 weeks last month. Afterward, I thought I want to adopt a dog someday
5. hobby

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#2 Sentences having took your feedback
Sometimes I dreamt of my working place even though I'm no longer working. It shows two types. One is that I was working with other emplyees getting by my limited English skills. The other one is that I have had a close call by mistake, and I woke up before some accident occured.

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Hello!


Thank you for accomplishing your homework! This kind of activity helps you to stay on track. Make English speaking and/or writing a daily habit of yours. It only seems impossible until it¡¯s 

done! So have faith you¡¯ll be better. Keep up the good work! I believe in you. See you in class!


Regards,

Teacher Lexie




#1 Engaging topics
1. To make good body shape & work out
>> Working out and having a good body shape.
2. About climate - I like variety of weathers.
>>I like a variety of weather.
3. food - In fact, I'm not interested in food. But, I hope to talk about basic topic like this with foreigners.
>> In fact, I'm not interested in food. But I hope to talk about basic topics like this with foreigners.
4. dogs - I don't have dogs, but I took care of my friend's dog for 2 weeks last month.
>>  I don't have a dog but I took care of my friend's dog for 2 weeks last month.
Afterward, I thought I want to adopt a dog someday.
>> GOOD!
5. hobby
>> GOOD!

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#2 Sentences having took your feedback
>> My thoughts having taken your feedback.
Sometimes I dreamt of my working place even though I'm no longer working. 
>> There were times I dreamt of my working place even though I'm no longer working there. 
It shows two types. 
>> My dream showed 2 situations.
One is that I was working with other employees getting by my limited English skills. 
>> GOOD!
The other one is that I have had a close call by mistake, and I woke up before some accident occured.
>> The other one is that I had a close call by mistake, and I woke up before some accident occurred.
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