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Hi, there.
The closing time is coming.
As I said this morning, I am working alone.
In fact, my colleague doctor came to the clinic.
He told me that he should prepare a presentation for Aestetic Academy.
Now, he is doing administrative work for the clinic though.
While I am extrovert and I love to spend my time to do interesting things with my close people, Dr.MJ is strongly introvert and he loves to work.
Dr. MJ wants to be a super rich.
He is apparently opposite side of me as for many things.
The only same thing is the interest about delicious food.
We plan to go to the restaurant which serve a good food this evening.
Do you know "Sam gye tang"?
It is a kind of traditional chicken soup in Korea.
As for my assignment, I prefer a bigger house.
If I live in a small one, I can't have my own room.
That's because I have three daughters.
Most Koreans prefer an apartment than a flat because of convenience.
In addition, I think the apartment is safer than the flat house.
What about you?

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Nice writing, Dr. Kim! I just would like to share that 'flat' is commonly used in the UK while 'apartment' is very common in the US. However, they mean the same thing. In addition, I would like to agree that apartments have better security than detached houses.-Faith-
Hi, there.
>> CORRECT
The closing time is coming.
>> CORRECT
As I said this morning, I am working alone.
>> CORRECT
In fact, my colleague doctor came to the clinic.
>> However, my colleague doctor came to the clinic.
He told me that he should prepare a presentation for Aestetic Academy.
>> He told me that he should prepare a presentation for Aesthetic Academy.
Now, he is doing administrative work for the clinic though.
>> CORRECT
While I am extrovert and I love to spend my time to do interesting things with my close people, Dr.MJ is strongly introvert and he loves to work.
>> While I am an extrovert and I love to spend my time doing interesting things with the people I am closed with, Dr. MJ is strongly introverted and he loves to work.
Dr. MJ wants to be a super rich.
>> Dr. MJ wants to be super rich.
He is apparently opposite side of me as for many things.
>> He is apparently the opposite of me in many things.
The only same thing is the interest about delicious food.
>> The only same thing we have is our interest in delicious food.
We plan to go to the restaurant which serve a good food this evening.
>> We plan to go to the restaurant which serves a good food this evening.
Do you know "Sam gye tang"?
>> CORRECT
It is a kind of traditional chicken soup in Korea.
>> CORRECT
As for my assignment, I prefer a bigger house.
>> CORRECT
If I live in a small one, I can't have my own room.
>> If I lived in a small one, I would not have my own room.
That's because I have three daughters.
>> As you know, I have three daughters.
Most Koreans prefer an apartment than a flat because of convenience.
>> Most Koreans prefer an apartment to a detached house because of convenience.
In addition, I think the apartment is safer than the flat house.
>> In addition, I think the apartment is safer than a detached house.
What about you?
>> CORRECT
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