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Hi, there.
It's sunny today after a long time.
That's why there are many patients/clients at the clinic.
Basically, I am busy every Monday, because of many administrative paper work.
Fortunately, it seems that everythings are going to be fine.
Since I read your answer so far, I realized that you are somewhat introvert.
As you know, I am so outgoing.
Now, my clinic are closed, and I am totally exausted.
I love my work, neverthless, sometimes I want to be from my work.
After this writing, I will drive my car without the roof on my way home.
It always makes me feel happy.
Meanwhile, I promised that I would exercise with my wife this evening; going upstairs 26stories.
I am not sure I can do that.
If I was not busy today, I would have had enough energy.
As for my assignment, I don't understand exactly what you mean, I guess.
If I am the mayor of our city, I can help many companies increase their productivity.
And, I can help poor people with the money and the education.
See you tomorrow.

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Don't worry, your answer looks like you clearly understood the homework question, Dr. Kim! You are right, I am an introvert, but most likely an ambivert. I hope you did your exercise well last night. See you!-Faith-
Hi, there.
>> CORRECT
It's sunny today after a long time. 
That's why there are many patients/clients at the clinic.
>> It's sunny today after a long time that's why there are many patients/clients at the clinic. 
Basically, I am busy every Monday, because of many administrative paper work.
>> Basically, I am busy every Monday because of many administrative paperwork.
Fortunately, it seems that everythings are going to be fine.
>> Fortunately, it seems that everything is going to be fine.
Since I read your answer so far, I realized that you are somewhat introvert.
>> CORRECT
As you know, I am so outgoing.
>> CORRECT
OR Apparently, I am an extrovert.
Now, my clinic are closed, and I am totally exausted.
>> Now, my clinic is closed, and I am totally exhausted.
I love my work, neverthless, sometimes I want to be from my work.
>> I love my work, nevertheless, sometimes I want to be away from my work.
After this writing, I will drive my car without the roof on my way home.
>> CORRECT
OR After writing, I will drive back home with the top down.
It always makes me feel happy.
>> CORRECT
Meanwhile, I promised that I would exercise with my wife this evening; going upstairs 26stories.
>> Meanwhile, I promised that I would exercise with my wife this evening; going up to the 26th floor by the stairs.
I am not sure I can do that.
>> CORRECT
If I was not busy today, I would have had enough energy.
>> CORRECT
As for my assignment, I don't understand exactly what you mean, I guess.
>> CORRECT
If I am the mayor of our city, I can help many companies increase their productivity.
>> If I were the mayor of our city, I could help many companies increase their productivity.
And, I can help poor people with the money and the education.
>> Furthermore, I can help poor people with money and education.
See you tomorrow.
>> CORRECT
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