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How necessary do you think are family gatherings?

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About family gathering, I think the more family gathering you have, the better.

The more family gathering, the closer family relationship becomes and we can take care of each other easier.

However, if the family lives far away, it is difficult to meet then often.

For my family, my brother¡¯s family are in Vietnam and the other family members live in 5-6 hours distance by a car.

In addition, not everyone in the family can take time off every holiday because of their own work, so it is even more difficult to see their faces.

So, our family often calls to say hello and meet in not holiday.Every time I see my family after a long time, I feel good and grateful that I have a family. So, If we have a chance, I think it would be good to gather often.

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Thank you for this Philip!

About family gathering, I think the more family gathering you have, the better.
>>> correct  
The more family gathering, the closer family relationship becomes and we can take care of each other easier.
>>>  The more family gatherings, the closer family relationship becomes and we can take care of each other easier. 
However, if the family lives far away, it is difficult to meet then often.
>>> However, if the family lives far away, it is difficult to meet them often.  
>>> OR: However, if the family lives far away, it is difficult to meet each other often.  
For my family, my brother¡¯s family are in Vietnam and the other family members live in 5-6 hours distance by a car.
>>> OR: For my family, my brother¡¯s family are in Vietnam and the other family members live 5-6 hours drive away. 
In addition, not everyone in the family can take time off every holiday because of their own work, so it is even more difficult to see their faces.
>>>   correct   
So, our family often calls to say hello and meet in not holiday.
>>>  So, our family often calls to say hello and meet not on a holiday.  
Every time I see my family after a long time, I feel good and grateful that I have a family. 
>>>     correct    
So, If we have a chance, I think it would be good to gather often.
>>>      correct   
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