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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the most dangerous insect/animal?

I think there are many kinds of dangerous animals.
For example, such as giant elephants and wolf are of course dangerous, fortunately I haven't see these animals in my city.
But, sometimes dangerous animals appear in cities and villages in Korea.
This is a wild boar(wild pig).
Normaly, wild boar live in mountain and forest.
But, in winter, it's cold and there is nothing to feed, so it appears in the village.
And they damage farms or damage people.
Very rarely they are appeared Seoul.
Someone says it a joke, "I can to win a wild boar by fighting".
I think it's difficult to win a wild boar without weapons.
So, I picked a wild boar as a dangerous animal.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the most dangerous insect/animal?


I think there are many kinds of dangerous animals.
>> CORRECT!
For example, such as giant elephants and wolf are of course dangerous, fortunately I haven't see these animals in my city.
>> For example, such animals like giant elephants and wolves are of course dangerous; fortunately I haven't seen these animals in my city.
But, sometimes dangerous animals appear in cities and villages in Korea.
>> CORRECT!
This is a wild boar (wild pig).
>> CORRECT!
Normaly, wild boar live in mountain and forest.
>> Normally, wild boars live in mountains and forests.
But, in winter, it's cold and there is nothing to feed, so it appears in the village.
>> But, in winter, it's cold and there is nothing to feed on, so it appears in the village.
And they damage farms or damage people.
>> They damage farms or even hurt people.
Very rarely they are appeared Seoul.
>> They rarely appear in Seoul.
Someone says it a joke, "I can to win a wild boar by fighting".
>> Someone says it a joke, "I can win against a wild boar by fighting".
I think it's difficult to win a wild boar without weapons.
>> CORRECT!
So, I picked a wild boar as a dangerous animal.
>> So, I picked wild boar as a dangerous animal.

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