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Hello, T.Faith.
It's a nice weather today.
There is a good news.
Our guppy gave a birth.
My second daughter brought a couple of guppies at home about 3 months ago.
I remember that she got those fishes from the teacher of some academy.
Anyway, one of guppy passed away soon, and the rest one gave a birth two babies about 2 months ago; sadly, one baby was dead soon.
Today, adult guppy gave a birth again.
And I heard that 9 babies appeared so far.
Since I could restore my energy yesterday, I can work at the clinic with joy today.
There are many controversial things about marriage in Korea.
Long time ago, man usually prepared house for the marriage, while woman prepared furnitures, TV, friger, kitchen goods, and so on.
In fact, married couple lived with man's parents, so they didn't need a new house.
Nowadays, young couple don't live with old people anymore.
However, the traditional preperation of marriage lasts so far.
Of course, there's been many change, and should be.
See you soon.

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I think the baby guppies are the icing on a cake, Dr. Kim. I know everybody is happy and excited upon seeing them. It's good to see life. Thank you for sharing the marriage custom in your country. Take care!-Faith-
Hello, T.Faith.
>> Hello, T. Faith.
It's a nice weather today.
>> CORRECT
There is a good news.
>> Also, there is good news.
Our guppy gave a birth.
>> Our guppy gave birth.
My second daughter brought a couple of guppies at home about 3 months ago.
>> My second daughter brought a couple of guppies at home about three months ago.
I remember that she got those fishes from the teacher of some academy.
>> I remember that she got those fish from her teacher of an academy.
Anyway, one of guppy passed away soon, and the rest one gave a birth two babies about 2 months ago; sadly, one baby was dead soon.
>> Anyway, one of the guppies passed away soon, and the other one gave birth to two babies about two months ago; sadly, one baby was dead soon.
Today, adult guppy gave a birth again.
>> Today, the adult guppy gave birth again.
And I heard that 9 babies appeared so far.
>> I heard that nine babies appeared so far.
Since I could restore my energy yesterday, I can work at the clinic with joy today.
>> CORRECT
There are many controversial things about marriage in Korea.
>> CORRECT
Long time ago, man usually prepared house for the marriage, while woman prepared furnitures, TV, friger, kitchen goods, and so on.
>> Along time ago, men usually prepared a house for the marriage, while women prepared furniture, , television, refrigerator, and kitchen goods.
In fact, married couple lived with man's parents, so they didn't need a new house.
>> In fact, married couples lived with the men's parents, so they didn't need a new house.
Nowadays, young couple don't live with old people anymore.
>> CORRECT
OR Nowadays, young couples and their parents do not live under the same roof anymore.
However, the traditional preperation of marriage lasts so far.
>> However, the traditional preparation of marriage lasts so far.
Of course, there's been many change, and should be.
>> In fact, there's been many changes, and these should be.
See you soon.
>> CORRECT
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