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The motivation to serve as a soldier is a sense of loyalty and satisfaction derived from protecting against threats posed by North Korea. In fact the more they attempt to provoke or threaten, the stronger my motivation becomes.
And i aspire to be the best in the Navy worldwide. Theses motivations always awake me when i¡¯m frustrated from mistake.

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I can feel your drive to succeed in this field, Jun! Don't let anyone spoil it. See you!-Faith-
The motivation to serve as a soldier is a sense of loyalty and satisfaction derived from protecting against threats posed by North Korea. 
>> The motivation to serve as a soldier is the sense of loyalty and satisfaction derived from protecting against threats posed by North Korea. 
In fact the more they attempt to provoke or threaten, the stronger my motivation becomes.
>> CORRECT
And i aspire to be the best in the Navy worldwide. 
>> Also, I aspire to be the best in the Navy worldwide. 
Theses motivations always awake me when i¡¯m frustrated from mistake.
>> These motivations always awake me when I¡¯m frustrated from a mistake.
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