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Describe the worst trip you ever took. Where did you go? What made it a bad trip?

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My family went to Bito Island to go camping five years ago. The weather on the Island was so beautiful and my family had a relaxing time. However, when we ate some seafood for dinner, the problem happened. We suffered from stomachache because The seafood that we ate went bad. Ultimately, my family had to return home earlier than we expected.

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Good evening, Yun Ju! 

I appreciate you sharing your story! Always check your food before consuming it. Make sure the food is stored securely and isn't contaminated. If it has a bad smell, there's a big chance that it's already spoiled. 

- Kristine ^^ 

My family went to Bito Island to go camping five years ago.
>> Correct.
Or >> Five years ago, my family and I went camping in Bito Island.
The weather on the Island was so beautiful and my family had a relaxing time. 
>> My family and I enjoyed the peaceful atmosphere and lovely weather on the island.
However, when we ate some seafood for dinner, the problem happened. 
>> However, we had a problem when we had seafood for dinner. 
We suffered from stomachache because The seafood that we ate went bad. 
>> We had stomachaches because of the spoiled seafood we consumed.
Ultimately, my family had to return home earlier than we expected.
>> My family eventually had to depart sooner than we had planned.
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