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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How can people protect themselves from mosquito-borne diseases like malaria?


There are many deadly diseases give to human from the mosquitoes.
Typical diseases are dengue, malaria and other diseases different on the region and country.
So, we usually make efforts to prevent these disease.
For example, we spray pesticides or take vaccines for about diseases to avoid sick.
In addition, even the weather is hot, some people wear long clothes in the forest
or in the mountains.
A few days ago, I watched video about mosquitoes from youtube.
The content of this video is that a scientist said even if mosquitoes extinct, there is no problem
in the natural environment.
But, this argument is still a controversial issue.
Anyway, I hope to live a healthy life without getting sick.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How can people protect themselves from mosquito-borne diseases like malaria?


There are many deadly diseases give to human from the mosquitoes.
>> 
There are many deadly diseases that mosquitoes give to humans.
Typical diseases are dengue, malaria and other diseases different on the region and country.
>> Typical diseases are dengue, malaria and other diseases depending on the region and country.
So, we usually make efforts to prevent these disease.
>> So, we usually make efforts to prevent these diseases.
For example, we spray pesticides or take vaccines for about diseases to avoid sick.
>> For example, we spray insecticides or take vaccines for these diseases to avoid getting sick.
In addition, even the weather is hot, some people wear long clothes in the forest
or in the mountains.
>> CORRECT!
A few days ago, I watched video about mosquitoes from youtube.
>> A few days ago, I watched a video about mosquitoes on YouTube.
The content of this video is that a scientist said even if mosquitoes extinct, there is no problem
in the natural environment.
>> CORRECT!
But, this argument is still a controversial issue.
>> CORRECT!
Anyway, I hope to live a healthy life without getting sick.
>> CORRECT!
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