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Hi.
It rained too much in Korea these days.
A lot of people died and were injured.
Is your country Ok?
As I said in my previous essay, I bought a console game "Nintendo Switch", and I played it with my three daughters yesterday.
We had a blast.
After my daughters fell asleep, my wife and I played the game "It takes two".
It has a strong story; there are dad, mom, and daughter. these parents didn't get along with each other, so they decided to get divorce and told their kid about it. that kid really wanted her parents to recover their relationship, so she prayed for it. And then some kind of magic happened, and the parents changed into small dolls. Those parents are main actor, and we can control them. we have to complete all missions together. without mutual cooperation, we can't proceed any step.
I think this game is great for married couple.
As for my homework, if I can be a president, I will strenthen all penelties for all criminals.
It can make our world safer and happier for sure.

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I heard about the devastating tragedy in your country, Dr. Kim. I feel sorry for the victims and their families. I hope they can recover and be safe now. Anyway, your game had a story, so it was more interesting.-Faith-
Hi.
>> Hi!
It rained too much in Korea these days.
>> It has rained too much in Korea these days.
A lot of people died and were injured.
>> CORRECT
Is your country Ok?
>> Is your country okay?
As I said in my previous essay, I bought a console game "Nintendo Switch", and I played it with my three daughters yesterday.
>> CORRECT
We had a blast.
>> CORRECT
After my daughters fell asleep, my wife and I played the game "It takes two".
>> After my daughters fell asleep, my wife and I played the game, "It takes two."
It has a strong story; there are dad, mom, and daughter. 
>> It has a strong story; there are a father, a mother, and a daughter. 
these parents didn't get along with each other, so they decided to get divorce and told their kid about it. 
>> The parents didn't get along with each other, so they decided to get a divorce and told their child about it. 
that kid really wanted her parents to recover their relationship, so she prayed for it. 
>> That child really wanted her parents to recover their relationship, so she prayed for it. 
And then some kind of magic happened, and the parents changed into small dolls. 
>> Then some kind of magic happened, and the parents changed into small dolls. 
Those parents are main actor, and we can control them. 
>> Those parents are the main actors, and we can control them. 
we have to complete all missions together. 
>> We have to complete all missions together.
without mutual cooperation, we can't proceed any step.
>> Without mutual cooperation, we can't proceed with any step.
I think this game is great for married couple.
>> CORRECT
As for my homework, if I can be a president, I will strenthen all penelties for all criminals.
>> As for my homework, if I could be the president, I would strengthen all penalties for all criminals.
It can make our world safer and happier for sure.
>> CORRECT
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