¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework 07.14

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÃÖ*Ç
2023-07-14 1835

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you prefer living in the city or in the countryside?


I prefer to live in the city more than countryside.
That's way city life is convenient.
The advantage of city I think that cultural facilities, convenient facilities, store,
public transportation and etc.. so city is convenient.
On the other hands, in the case of countryside I feel doesn't convenient.
I occasionally visit my grand mother's house.
Her house location is the countryside of countryside.
There is no convenience store and no convenient facilities,
So, I don't well understand why my parents and grand mother prefer countryside.
But, these day's my thinks are changing little by little.
The idea is that if I live in the other house later, I want live in the country near the city.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you prefer living in the city or in the countryside?



I prefer to live in the city more than countryside.
>>  I prefer to live in the city more than the countryside.
That's way city life is convenient.
>> That's because the city life is convenient.
The advantage of city I think that cultural facilities, convenient facilities, store,
public transportation and etc.. so city is convenient.
>> The advantages of living in the city I think is that everyone has access to cultural facilities, convenient facilities, store, public transportation and many more, so living in the city is convenient.
On the other hands, in the case of countryside I feel doesn't convenient.
>> On the other hand, in the case of the countryside, I feel like it isn't convenient.
I occasionally visit my grandmother's house.
>> CORRECT!
Her house location is the countryside of countryside.
>> Her house's location is in the countryside.
There is no convenience store and no convenient facilities,
So, I don't well understand why my parents and grand mother prefer countryside.
>> There are no convenience stores and no convenient facilities, so I don't understand why my parents and grandmother prefer living in the countryside.
But, these day's my thinks are changing little by little.
>> But these days, my thoughts about it change little by little.
The idea is that if I live in the other house later, I want live in the country near the city.
>> The idea is that if I live in another house later on, I want live in the countryside near the city.

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
129128 What kind of work environment do you prefer for your ideal job? Á¶*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-06-28 0
129127 homework È«*¼± ¿Ï·á 2023-06-28 1
129126 Homework ¼Û*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2023-06-28 2248
129125 Writing task ¾È*Çü ¿Ï·á 2023-06-28 1690
129124 27.Jun.2023 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-06-28 2
129123 Homework Á¤*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2023-06-28 1607
129122 HOMEWORK3 ÀÌ*½Â ¿Ï·á 2023-06-28 0
129121 Describe how movies influence your look at life. ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-06-28 2
129120 Please correct my sentence ¿À*º½ ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 4
129119 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1301
129118 crops ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1
129117 homework 06.27 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 2238
129116 Homework 6/26 ±è*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1
129115 What hobbies do you enjoy? Why? °­*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1742
129114 The fiercest animal that I have seen ¼Û*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1710
129113 Can you kill insects in your house? ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1100
129112 I disagree! ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1042
129111 What is the best place in your country? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 2
129110 What are some effective measures social media platforms can... ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1744
129109 How can media contribute to overcoming societal divisions? ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-06-27 1892

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04