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Most people enjoy sports such as soccer, baseball, table tennis etc..
But someone say that "I'm not interested in doing sports"
One reason is that there are many things to enjoy like online games, watching Netflix, going for a drink with friends etc...
Another reason is that some people are a little shy. most of sports need partners. So they hate to play that.
But I think if they don't like a sports, regular physical activity is essential for our health.

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Good day, Isaac!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


Most people enjoy sports such as soccer, baseball, table tennis, etc.
>> CORRECT!
But someone say that "I'm not interested in doing sports"
>> But someone said that "I'm not interested in doing sports".
One reason is that there are many things to enjoy like online games, watching Netflix, going for a drink with friends, etc.
>> CORRECT!
Another reason is that some people are a little shy. 
>> CORRECT!
most of sports need partners. 
>> Most sports need partners. 
So they hate to play that.
>> CORRECT!
But I think if they don't like a sports, regular physical activity is essential for our health.
>> But I think if they don't like sports, regular physical activity is essential for our health.

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