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Q: Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
A: There are two types of people that spend their lives. One type of people want to spend their lives doing monotonous things not changing. This type of people are afraid of changing their lives and want the stable lives. Another type of people prefer to change their lives. This type of people want to challenge many kinds of things. And I am also this type of people. There are so many interesting in the world. I want to try and get new experiences and lessons from those experiences.

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Hi there! Thanks for answering your essay. Have a happy weekend~!^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
A: There are two types of people that spend their lives.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> There are two ways on how people want to spend their lives. 
 One type of people want to spend their lives doing monotonous things not changing. 
>>>  First, there are people who want to spend their lives doing monotonous things with no changes at all. 
This type of people are afraid of changing their lives and want the stable lives.
>>> These are the people who are afraid of changing their lives and want the stable lives.
 Another type of people prefer to change their lives. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
This type of people want to challenge many kinds of things. 
>>> This type of people want to take challenges by trying many things. 
And I am also this type of people.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 There are so many interesting in the world.
>>>  There are so many interesting things in the world.
 I want to try and get new experiences and lessons from those experiences.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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