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Yeosu is a city with a beautiful night sea.
As my husband's hometown, I used to often say that the sea is beautiful.
The Ocean Water Park is famous for playing in the water.
Also, Odongdo Island with beautiful camellia flowers is also recommended.
In addition, the Yeosu Marine Cable Car is entirely made of glass windows, and you can enjoy the experience of floating on the sea while passing through the sea.
Yeosu Pocha, which opens at night, is also a place worth visiting, where you can enjoy delicious food and busking.

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Eliana!
Thank you for sharing about Yeosu. I heard many stories about Yeosu and hope to see that if I got a chance.
Have a great day!
Aki~

Yeosu is a city with a beautiful night sea.
>>> CORRECT!

As my husband's hometown, I used to often say that the sea is beautiful.
>>> CORRECT!

The Ocean Water Park is famous for playing in the water.
>>> CORRECT!

Also, Odongdo Island with beautiful camellia flowers is also recommended.
>>> CORRECT!

In addition, the Yeosu Marine Cable Car is entirely made of glass windows, and you can enjoy the experience of floating on the sea while passing through the sea.
>>> CORRECT!

Yeosu Pocha, which opens at night, is also a place worth visiting, where you can enjoy delicious food and busking.
>>> CORRECT!

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