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How to earn money is only by doing part time job. I think they need to overcome their poor life until they are famous.
In order to do that, many famous artists have to encourage and cheer new artists. Their encouragements are only way to make new artists¡¯ ambitions.

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Hi, Robin.
I know you are tired this week so I really appreciate you spending time doing your homework. You are right! Being an artist is difficult, especially if you are not famous. So if that is really their passion, they have to endure it until they become famous.
-T. Caitlyn
How to earn money is only by doing part time job. 
>> Doing a part-time job is the only way to earn money. 
I think they need to overcome their poor life until they are famous.
>> I think they have to endure poverty until they become famous.
In order to do that, many famous artists have to encourage and cheer new artists. 
>> CORRECT
Their encouragements are only way to make new artists¡¯ ambitions.
>> Their encouragement is the only way to fuel new artists' ambitions.
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