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What do you think about eating disorders such as Anorexia and Bulimia? ? How serious are they in you

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These days eating disorders emerge as serious social problems. This is because many young people are especially likely to suffer from eating disorders. They could gain more serious problems in their bodies because they are still growing up. I believe that the increase in toxic media has contributed to the increase in eating disorders. many media these days constantly shows us distorted thin bodies that cannot exist in the real world. People should positively recognize their real bodies.

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Eating disorders are serious mental health disorders. They involve severe problems with your thoughts about food and your eating behaviors. You may eat much less or much more than you need. Eating disorders are medical conditions; they are not a lifestyle choice. 

- Kristine ^^ 

These days eating disorders emerge as serious social problems.
>> Eating disorders have grown into a serious social problem today.
This is because many young people are especially likely to suffer from eating disorders.
>> This is due to high rate of eating disorders among young people.
They could gain more serious problems in their bodies because they are still growing up.
>> Since they are still growing, they might acquire more serious problems with their bodies.
I believe that the increase in toxic media has contributed to the increase in eating disorders.
>> I believe the surge from eating disorder is due to the effects of toxic media.
Many media these days constantly shows us distorted thin bodies that cannot exist in the real world. 
>> Nowadays, most media shows us the tiny, twisted bodies that don't exist in reality. 
People should positively recognize their real bodies.
>> Positive self-recognition of one's actual body is vital.

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