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HOMEWORK for 07/13
Write 5-8 sentences
TOPIC: What do you want to promote about your city? Why should it be more popular? Why should people try it? Kindly explain.


I want to promote what Gonjiam my city is
the city has big resort and so close in distance to Seoul so if someone live in city arond capital they visite to easy and ther is Hwa Dam forest around resort
The forest is very beautiful in fall season

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Happy Friday, Min Seog! Your answers in the homework I'm giving you is consistently getting better. I like how you always try your best to express your thoughts as clearly and completely as you can. Keep it up! ~ T. Marie ^^ 
I want to promote what Gonjiam my city is
the city has big resort and so close in distance to Seoul so if someone live in city arond capital they visite to easy and ther is Hwa Dam forest around resort
>> What I want to promote in Gonjiam city is it's big resort. 
>> It is close to Seoul, so they can easily visit it if they live around the capital city.
>> There is also the Hwa Dam forest around the resort. 
The forest is very beautiful in fall season
>> The forest is very beautiful in fall. 
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