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I agree with this decision that the government enforce such a strong punishment for shameless drunk drivers.

It might be caused death or serious injury for innocent someone and such accidents bring some families destory.

I suuport that the punishment for drunk driver make stronger and more severe ia as an imprisonment and hevey fines.

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Good day, Lily. I really appreciate your time and effort in doing your composition. I totally agree with your answer. People should be responsible enough as well as be cautious of our actions to prevent accidents. Take care always!~T. Lyn
I agree with this decision that the government enforce such a strong punishment for shameless drunk drivers.
>>I agree with the government's decision to impose such strong penalties on shameless drunk drivers.
It might be caused death or serious injury for innocent someone and such accidents bring some families destory.
>>Innocent people can be killed or seriously injured and some families are destroyed by such accidents.
I suuport that the punishment for drunk driver make stronger and more severe ia as an imprisonment and hevey fines.
>>I support tougher and harsher penalties for drunk drivers, with jail sentences and hefty fines.
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