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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How does the weather change your feelings?

The weather affects my fellings and body condition.
On the sunny days, I wake up earlier than other day, and my body condition is good.
So, I don't get tired easily.
On the other hand, rainy days or snowy days I get tired quickly even I don't do anything.
The winter season snowy days is not bad more than summer season.
Because, winter season is dry weather.
But, summer is very humid and discomfort index is high.
That's why I dislike what to do in the rainy day.
Unfortunately, the weather forecast said tomorrow Korea weather is will be rainy day.
In addition, I will have to go my father's company in the early morning.
Tomorrow will be quickly tired day. :(

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How does the weather change your feelings?


The weather affects my fellings and body condition.
>> The weather affects my feelings and body condition.
On the sunny days, I wake up earlier than other day, and my body condition is good.
>> On the sunny days, I wake up earlier than other days, and my body condition is good.
So, I don't get tired easily.
>> CORRECT!
On the other hand, rainy days or snowy days I get tired quickly even I don't do anything.
>> On the other hand, when it's rainy or snowy, I get tired quickly even if I don't do anything.
The winter season snowy days is not bad more than summer season.
>> Snowy days during the winter season is not bad more than the summer season.
Because, winter season is dry weather.
>> That's because the winter season has a dry weather.
But, summer is very humid and discomfort index is high.
>> CORRECT!
That's why I dislike what to do in the rainy day.
>> That's why I dislike doing something on rainy days.
Unfortunately, the weather forecast said tomorrow Korea weather is will be rainy day.
>> Unfortunately, the weather forecast said that it will be rainy tomorrow.
In addition, I will have to go my father's company in the early morning.
>> In addition, I have to go to my father's company in the early morning.
Tomorrow will be quickly tired day. :(
>> I think I will easily get tired tomorrow. :(

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