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In my opinion, the people would like to challenge to their limitation.
Moreover, they enjoy feel that overcome their limitation.
This emotion gives sense of freedom to them and cheer them up to another something challenges.
When they are floating in the sky, they can see beautiful of nature.
They can feel decrease stress of social. I'm periodically visit beach and mountain because of this reason.
Many people gain healing times through natures.
And extreme sports that is like sky diving can gain motivation about something.

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Hey Sae Bom! 

Did you know that skydiving makes you happy? It gives your body a huge rush of serotonin. That's the hormone that makes you feel really happy – so skydiving, by its very nature, makes people incredibly happy!

- Kristine ^^ 

In my opinion, the people would like to challenge to their limitation.
>> In my opinion, people would like to push their limitations.
Moreover, they enjoy feel that overcome their limitation.
>> Additionally, they like the feeling of overcoming their limitations.
This emotion gives sense of freedom to them and cheer them up to another something challenges.
>> This feeling offers people a sense of independence and encourages them to take on new challenges.
When they are floating in the sky, they can see beautiful of nature.
>> They can see the beauty of nature as they are floating in the air.
They can feel decrease stress of social. 
>> They feel less social stress. 
I'm periodically visit beach and mountain because of this reason.
>> This is why I frequently visit beaches and mountains.
Many people gain healing times through natures.
>> Many people seek healing in nature.
And extreme sports that is like sky diving can gain motivation about something.
>> Extreme sports like skydiving might inspire people to do something.
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