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I think having few close friends is better than having many friends. We can care our friends more. But, having many friends can help us. If we need help, we can ask our friends to help.

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I think having few close friends is better than having many friends. 
>>> CORRECT!

We can care our friends more. 
>>> We can care for our friends more. 

But, having many friends can help us. 
>>> CORRECT!

If we need help, we can ask our friends to help.
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