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I am disappointed corruption of religious people, ministers, monks and even priests.

Human desires and capitalism won human's will with celibacy abd religious displine.

He is an evil swinder and a vulgar businessman not a monk who pretending to religion.

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Ms. Lily!
It takes million times to think if a person will enter a monastery or a seminary because he already vowed to do certain responsibilities.
They have to consider those because in the end, if they failed or quit, they could be the reason for people's frustration. There are so many cases like this in the Philippines. So other religion mock and do not believe in their practice.
Have a great day!
Aki~

I am disappointed corruption of religious people, ministers, monks and even priests.
>>> I am disappointed with the corruption of religious people, ministers, monks, and even priests.

Human desires and capitalism won human's will with celibacy abd religious displine.
>>> Human desires and capitalism won human will with celibacy and religious discipline.

He is an evil swinder and a vulgar businessman not a monk who pretending to religion.
>>> He is an evil swindler and a vulgar businessman, not a monk who pretends to be religious.
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