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What did you enjoy doing as a child?

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When I was as a child, I used to enjoy a lot of things such as going to fishing, assembling robots, playing basketball , and fighting with my sister. I don't have anything to write, so I'll just write my diary here. Nowadays, I'm feeling the better and depressed because it doesn't work as I thought for an interview and leaving other country of internship. Even if I get feeling with up and down, you always make me fun for almost a half of year. Whether you're happy or not, so, I respect you who are always showing your positive things to me. I can't thank you enough, I want to keep this relationship between you and me. Unlike Mr.Yoon and Lee Sang Jun. :)

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Hi, Elic! You are smarter than you think; stronger than you can ever imagine, all you need is to go for that dream. Start today and you will reach the destination. Keep up the good work. I am always here for you.

When I was as a child, I used to enjoy a lot of things such as going to fishing, assembling robots, playing basketball , and fighting with my sister.
>>> When I was a child, I used to enjoy a lot of things, such as going fishing, assembling robots, playing basketball, and fighting with my sister.

I don't have anything to write, so I'll just write my diary here.
>>> CORRECT.

Nowadays, I'm feeling the better and depressed because it doesn't work as I thought for an interview and leaving other country of internship.
>>> Nowadays, I'm feeling better and depressed because it doesn't work as I thought for an interview and I'm leaving another country for an internship.

Even if I get feeling with up and down, you always make me fun for almost a half of year.
>>> Even if I get feeling up and down, you always make me fun for almost a half of the year.

Whether you're happy or not, so, I respect you who are always showing your positive things to me. 
>>> Whether you're happy or not, I respect you for always showing me positive things.

I can't thank you enough, I want to keep this relationship between you and me. 
>>> I can't thank you enough. I want to keep this relationship between you and me.

Unlike Mr.Yoon and Lee Sang Jun. 
>>> CORRECT.
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