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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What popular travel destination do you want to avoid?

When I go to domestic travel or overseas travel before, I searched popular place from internet.
In the domestic travel case I don't go very often popular place.
That's why there are to many people and a food, an entrance ticket price is ridiculously high.
And I think this problem of Korea tour place is the same everywhere.
So, these days I am tired of domestic travel.
The next case is overseas travel.
Actually, I don't know it well overseas travel.
because, I have not traveled to many countries yet.
So, on the other way I try to visit popular place.
I think, it was also good experience to visit famous place.
But, famous place is crowed place.
Therefore, if I go to next trip, I want go to a vacation spot.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What popular travel destination do you want to avoid?


When I go to domestic travel or overseas travel before, I searched popular place from internet.
>> Before, whenever I travel domestically or do an overseas trip, I search for popular places on the internet.
In the domestic travel case I don't go very often popular place.
>> When I do domestic trips, I don't often go to popular places.
That's why there are to many people and a food, an entrance ticket price is ridiculously high.
>> The reason is because there are a lot of people, different kinds of food, and entrance ticket prices are ridiculously high.
And I think this problem of Korea tour place is the same everywhere.
>> I think this problem in Korea's tourist places is the same everywhere.
So, these days I am tired of domestic travel.
>> So, these days I feel tired of domestic trips.
The next case is overseas travel.
>> The next case is overseas trips.
Actually, I don't know it well overseas travel.
>> Actually, I don't know overseas trips well.
because, I have not traveled to many countries yet.
>> That's because I have not traveled to many countries yet.
So, on the other way I try to visit popular place.
>> So, on the other way I try to visit popular places.
I think, it was also good experience to visit famous place.
>> I think, it was also a good experience to visit famous places.
But, famous place is crowed place.
>> But, a famous place is a crowed place.
Therefore, if I go to next trip, I want go to a vacation spot.
>> Therefore, if I go on my next trip, I want to go to a vacation spot.

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